Pure Ones [Review]
Tuesday, July 15, 2008
Author: smu-chan
Title: Pure Ones
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Smu8chan/
Reviewer: JunsuShii @ Secret-Melodies
Title: 3/5
The title is okay. Pure ones kind of sounds like a title that would be obvious.
Poster/Background: 6/10
The Poster is very nice ^^. I really like how it’s black and gives off dark vibe.
Forewords: 3/5
The forewords were informative and well thought out.
Plot: 9/15
The plot was something not so special sorry to say. I’ve read many fics of Yunjae as vampires.
Flow: 6/10
The flow was kind of fast and I was a little confused at some parts.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 3/10
I know that English isn’t your first language but the grammar in this needs to be fixed. If you need someone to fix your grammar for you, I can help ^^. Ps: When you use (an), it should be used only with words that start with vowels. EX) an apple, an orange. You use (a) when it starts with a constant. EX) a horse, a bike.
Characterization: 7/10
The characterization was a bit overused. JaeJoong is commonly always the bright cheerful guy and Yunho the mysterious person.
Originality: 6/10
A vampire story line is overused but I still enjoyed it.
Writing style: 3/5
Just need to fix up the grammar and your set.
Overall enjoyment: 8/10
I enjoyed it quite a bit, because, well I LOVE YUNAJE FICS. They’re the only ones I read, aside from the occasionally YooSu.
BONUS: 10/10 Loving that you used YunJae, which gives you extra points. Plus, I’m a harsh grader J.
Overall score: 80/100
Good Job!