Only Your Love Will Satisfy Me [Review]
Tuesday, July 15, 2008
Title: Only Your Love Will Satisfy Me
Author: ChaeYo
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/ChaeYo/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: ctanonymous @ Secret Melodies
Title: 5/5
It's a sweet title. There's a lot of romance in the title that's apparent, and that matches the genre of your story. I like romantic things. ^^ Hehe.
Poster/Background: 8/10
It certainly looks very pretty. ^^ The colors are mesmerizing, and the fonts are lovely. But, I did get a little mixed up in your poster. As in, there's too much going on. Everything blends together, so I can't really tell what is what.
Forewords: 1/5
I have to deduct points for this. ]: There is nothing about your story in your forewords at all, except for the part about it being yaoi. You should add a brief description of the story or driving questions in your forewords. But, you did introduce your story a little, hence the 1.
Plot: 12/15
Interesting... Yaoi with a very intense and deep relationship. And, it's not really common on Winglin. I like the romance. :D
Flow: 5/10
Not to be too harsh, but the flow in your story was entirely too fast. Period. The rated scenes were very rushed, and the transitions between different scenes are too quick and sudden. You jump from scene to scene too quickly and suddenly. The flow should develop events eventually in the story and stay consistent throughout the entire plot, not move so fast all the time.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 12/15
It's pretty good, but not quite perfect yet. Well, you tend to not use commas in dialogues a lot, and that makes the quote sentence incomplete. And you have some careless spelling errors.
Ex: ‘’We are going to have some fun’’ Minho said and chuckled making the older boy chook on his own saliva. = "We are going to have some fun," Minho said and chuckled, making the older boy choke on his own saliva.
Characterization: 8/10
Good... I could tell how passionate the characters were about each other by their words and actions. Good job describing them.
Originality: 8/10
Well, I can't say that your story is the most original. There are a lot of yaoi and romance stories out there on Winglin, but none of them were exactly like yours. I just like the little creativity elements that you include in here.
Writing Style: 5 /5
I like your writing style. It's organized a lot, and the text isn't all bunched up. It's very easy to read and simple to understand.
Overall Enjoyment: 7/10
I didn't like your story that much because, well, I wasn't familiar with the stars that you wrote about, and I don't really enjoy yaoi that much. But, I love some of the humor and romance in your story. (:
Bonus: 3/5
I like the quote on your poster, the beautiful poster itself, and your romantic story.
Total: 66/100