Just Maybe...You Belong With Me [Review]
Tuesday, July 15, 2008
Author: Animeuver
Story URL/Link: http://championmugger.livejournal.com/7758.html
Story Title:Just Maybe...You Belong With Me
Reviewer: 류인
Title: 3/5
{The title is nice. With the deep meaning behind, it caught my interest to continue the story. The only thing was that it’s too direct and simple, plus the words were not strong enough to actually make people to remember the title easily. }
Poster/Picture: 7/10
{I can’t judge anything from the background, since it’s under Live Journal’s format. But from the main Poster, I could only visualize the story’s characters, not the plot. Only Yunho and Changmin’s faces could be seen, showing not much of the message. }
Forewords/Epilogue+ Author’s Notes: 4/5
{ I was having time searching for the link ‘Forewords’, and found out you didn’t put any. I suppose you separated it into your Epilogue and Author’s words instead. I combined both of the marks together, hope you don’t mind. It’s clean for me, so it was quite okay. }
Plot: 10/15
{ I’ve read similar plots exactly like this, although the characters were not completely same. Nevertheless, you twisted and turned a bit of it, which I love it a lot. Well, the happy Ending was of course, expected. But it was ended in a neat cut, with none draggy scenes, which I appreciated a lot. }
Flow: 7/10
{It was flowing smoothly. Too smooth. I saw no Climax, for it was already kind of expected. }
Grammar/Vocabulary: 11/15
{ There was almost no spelling errors. But when it came to grammar, many readers made the same mistake. It’s highly NOT recommended to mix two kinds of Tenses in a story, as it’s quite complicated. Unless you’re writing in different time backgrounds, please do not use Present Tense and Past Tense in the same time. So far, only long novels involve in this kind of skill. In this story, your mixing Tenses were somehow confusing, sometimes not giving the logical time background. You should polish up it more. }
Characterization: 8/10
{ The characters were handled nicely. We understood well about Yunho and Changmin’s characters and could actually be completely absorbed in their thoughts. But still, it is advised to give further description about Changmin/Yunho emotions example like their feelings towards each other. You can make full use of the thesaurus and add in some ‘spices’ on their sentiments. }
Originality: 7/10
{I’ve seen similar works. It’s recommended for you to start focus on your favourite genre when writing your stories, regardless of the format. By this, you can train yourself to create your own unique plots that can be your trademarks. }
Writing style: 3/5
{ To be honest, I did not see your obvious personal style of writing in here. It was nice, but it was considered as a moderate standard. Your potential is there, so keep it up! }
Overall enjoyment: 7/10
{ This is the fourth time reading this similar story. But the way you presented your story was quite interesting in a light atmosphere, which I like it a lot. }
Bonus: 4/5
{ I’m a Cassiopeian ever since their Debut, and my Favourite is Jung Yunho. You’re lucky =)}
Overall score: 71/100
{Girl, why did you lock the Smut scene? I’ve deducted some points because of that. It could’ve been better if the original was there. The edited version was too boring. }
Reviewer’s Words:
{ I reviewed this with the standard reviewer’s format, so I did not put many details on them. For the Beta-Reader’s standard, I could’ve written the whole 3 pages of it, for you to have the wide space to improve. I hope I was not harsh on this. If you wish to have my Beta version of this review, you can make another request from us again. Feel free to do so, I would be glad to give you more suggestions on your stories. I’ll be anticipating your new stories, so keep producing them with your better plots and styles =)}