Friday, April 26, 2002
Story Name: She’s My Shadow
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jaejoongloverr4/
Reviewer: Ishwarya @ Secret Melodies
Title: 4/5
A perfect title for your story. I like it.
Even though you title isn’t unique, I’d like to commend your sensibility to opting out of weird titles.
Poster/Background: 8/10
5 out of 5 for poster! All the main characters have been included and it looks bright as well as dark. However, I would have preferred a better background. Only winglin gives its writers a chance to host a background, right? So, I feel it could have been a better one.
Forewords: 3/5
You did include the characters sketches in your forewords, which is very good. But again, when it’s a thriller, you should refrain from describing your characters in so much detail. Your readers will understand who’s who, and the fun vanishes into thin air.
Plot: 10/15
Right now, I can’t comment much about your plot as it is incomplete. But till now, I found it interesting. Keep up the good work! I’d like to review your fan fiction, after you’ve completed.
Flow: 8/10
Your flow is good. Even though it gets a bit boring in certain areas, you don’t seem to rush over the plot. Well done!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10\15
Your grammar and diction is commendable. However, you tend to make a lot of typo errors and genuine spelling errors. Please type patiently!
Characterization: 8/10
You stuck to your characters. You didn’t change them much. However, if you don’t add any quirky habits, the characters seem monotonous. I hope you understand what I intend to explain.
Originality: 12\15
The plot that you chose is very common. Many renowned writers have adapted this concept in their own style. Similarly, you have adapted it in your style. I will definitely correct my marks, if your originality enhances at the end of the story.
Writing style: 4/5
Your writing style is very simple and blunt. I like blunt writers. ^_^ I just wish that you correct your spelling errors and make it an unhindered read.
Overall enjoyment: 8/10
Frankly, I didn’t enjoy much because of the abrupt SMUT part. I would have recommended you to add it later on. Anyway, please correct the errors and request again. I’d certainly give it a read for the second time to appreciate your effort.
Overall score: 75/100