Title: 2/5

Typical and clichéd plot. I have read many story titles like this before. But it was short, neat and simple. You might like to change ‘short love story’ to ‘one-shot’ so that the title will be shorter. Usually the shorter the titles the better, even adding techniques like a simile would make the title more interesting and memorable. I could see what you were trying to do to make the story fit with the title, but it was a little off (didn’t completely relate to the story.)

Poster/Background: 9/10

Poster: The poster is very effective and nice. In fact it is one of my most favourite posters. Your poster was not crowded and the expressions on the characters faces were really suited the mood of the story. The colour did suit the poster but not the theme of the story. Overall it was good, maybe a little change in the colour of the poster to suit the mini mysterious mood at the end of the story could have made it even better. The quote was effectively used, but it was too long and too small.
Background: One word… WONDERFUL! No problems with it at all. Usually I don’t like it when part of the poster is in the background, because it interferes with the words, but yours didn’t, so good!

Forewords: 4.5/5

You could have added Bryan in the cast list. It was simple and straight away I could tell what the story was about.

Plot: 10/15

Because of its clichéd plot, I’m sorry I had to mark you down. But the twist with Chun being Jeremy not Bryan and Selina’s beginning side story got you marks for this section. I’m a little confused with something. Usually during the graduation balls the teachers don’t allocate a partner to everyone, the guys usually would ask the girls out and graduation ceremonies are never announced in the last minute, so was all that part of the plot or you didn’t know that graduation ceremonies are like that?

Flow: 9.5/10

The beginning, climax and ending was well structured, I could see them, strengthening the ending would make the flow of the ‘wave’ reach it’s end.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10\15

Grammar and vocabulary are your main problems. I did not pick up any spelling mistakes. Proof-read your chapters before you upload them. Main problem with the grammar is the past and present tense, many writers have this problem. Make sure you check your prepositions (on, at, in, etc.) as well. There isn’t a main problem with your vocabulary, but it really needs to be checked. The way the characters were speaking seemed funny; I think it is your grammar that let you down on the vocabulary.

Characterization: 2/10

Only a tiny insight to what Ella and Bryan thought, and the what the gown dress looked like. Not enough. I need to see your characters developing, what they are like, their characteristics, what do they look like, and many more. A huge let down on your mark.

Originality: 8\15

This is another one of the areas where it let your mark down. The guy leaves the girl at childhood. He changes his name when he comes back. Clichéd. Typical high school set scene with the normal and boring life. Read too many plots like these before. The twist at the end was great though. Where Chun is actually Jeremy, I thought it would have been Bryan. Selina’s beginning side story was great.

Writing style: 4\5

I love your writing style, and yet unnecessary descriptions were added at times.

Overall enjoyment: 10/10
I enjoyed the every single moment reading the story. Well done and good job.

Overall score: 69 /100

Other comments: Sorry if you are offended with the mark. Though I hope it will help with your future writing. Best of luck!